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An old woman on the docks gave
her scraps of soup-kitchen bread to the gulls.
The elders sank their beaks to the ground before her
while a small fledgling hopped in her cart,
nested in the plastic bags.

They withdrew from the sounds of frothing waves,
warmed each other in the shadows of city streets.
The bird shed his down, glossed his flightless wings with
a tawny coat. His eyes grew bleary;
he huddled on the woman’s knees.

She died, at home on the concrete,
wrapped in the pilling fabrics she had gathered.
The gull dragged his heavy, useless wings
over her corpse, feathering her limbs, grateful.

The plastic bags surged into the wind,
scattering frantically, weaving through airshafts and alleys.
The gull stumbled after them, his wings scraping back to the docks,
searching for sympathy in the stiff planks and pulsing waves.

He found weak timbers and cold water.
“We have nothing for you,” they said.
“You left your flight and your home here,
years ago.”
©2008-2009 ~UrufuChikara
:iconurufuchikara:

Author's Comments

Edit: Reworked second stanza and put a few touches here and there. I think it's better. Also, slightly different title.

(Sheesh, haven't heard from me in a while, eh? How are you!)

This is basically the only poem I've written for school that I actually like.
Entirely up to critique, if you want to give it. (Does the title work?) Many thanks if you do. <3
Enjoy. :3

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:iconxxcupidxstuntxx:
I love it! That's so powerful and it just works! <3

--
I don't know what I want, but I know how to get it.

“It is convenient that there be gods, and, as it is convenient, let us believe there are.” - Ovid.
:iconhilakos:
Very sad and sweet, great job.

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Studies have shown that 8 out of 10 people suffer from genital herpes. What? Are the other two enjoying it?!
:iconcitronnier:
Awe, thats sad.

And yet, very good writing!
:iconkyouko-kun:
This is a rather beautiful story--I'd love to (if only I had time!) do this gray toned illustrations for it, one small scene hemmed in next to another.

In any case, I like how brief it is, yet poignant at the same time. Bravo!

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Memories like fine chalk
As the wind could blow them away so fast
Leaving fragments of images and the hope of the past --=Asphyziata Memories
:iconurufuchikara:
Really? I'd totally let you, and would love to see what you come up with - if only you had time indeed. (I can relate. xD)
Thank you very much! :heart:

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MOVED!

~ruffienne
:iconurufuchikara:
Heh, my mind is bleak, what do I say. xD;
Thank you though! :heart:

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MOVED!

~ruffienne
:iconurufuchikara:
Thank you very much! :heart:

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MOVED!

~ruffienne
:iconurufuchikara:
I'm glad! Thank you! :heart:

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MOVED!

~ruffienne
:icondomo-dono:
I'm...not sure how to say it in words. It makes me feel...antiqued, aged, and closed....yet opened at the same time. (picking at words that come to mind to label my emotions)

It's BEAUTIFUL. I really, really do love this.

FAVE LOVE POWER SKY BLUE (ruins the moment)

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DON'T TOUCH TORIDE-KUN

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